I've wrote it and you're reading it <3 ~

[Dalal Khalid]

^^^
Part of "Dalal" ~ :P :$

[Unlucky]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Dalal Khalid

“You know some things, you are stunning in applying some of them, but you have weakness points that you don’t realize, because you only do use your strength points and when you get to the realization of your all, you will commune with the truth of your imperfection.”
You are welcome to correct any mistakes any time <3

"You are welcome to correct any mistakes any time"
^^^
?was this part of the text

to be honest , the text is really confusing . you are using pronouns like you are talking about things we all know !! for example
?"you are stunning in applying some of them"
?what does "them" refer to ? and what are the things
LOL

sounds mysterious, but only the person ,whom you wrote to, can understand it

Thanks for posting

waiting for the next one

[Dalal Khalid]

Yes it refers to things
LOL
How about posting a whole chapter that will satisfy you :P
Yes it's true you can't understand it like this but i was asking about the grammer and spelling LOL
doesn't matter I didn't fix everything
I am still working on finishing the first draft with all of it flows :$ <3
I am proud of it <3

[Unlucky]

lol
dont get the wrong idea Dalal,the text seems good, but I wanted to point out that it was difficult to understand, thats all


and I'm proud of you, you gonna be a good writer someday


:here are some tips

"but you have weakness points"
in English they usually just say you have weaknesses, and same situation for "strength points "

keep writing

[Dalal Khalid]

I understand and I agree but i didn't know how to write it in any other way, you may suggest and correct it for me
any ideas ?

[Dalal Khalid]

"asked her when she is supposed to start working. "
للآن مو عارفة اصيغها ابي اقول سألتها متى المفروض تبدأ عملها وماطلع من مخي شي يمكن ذي المحاولة الآلف بعد المليون لصياغة الجملة :(

:/

[Dalal Khalid]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Unlucky

lol
dont get the wrong idea Dalal,the text seems good, but I wanted to point out that it was difficult to understand, thats all


and I'm proud of you, you gonna be a good writer someday


:here are some tips

"but you have weakness points"
in English they usually just say you have weaknesses, and same situation for "strength points "

keep writing

OOOOh now I understand thaaank you hahaha <3

[Unlucky]

gotta go, I will be back later

[Unlucky]

المشاركة الأصلية كتبت بواسطة Dalal Khalid

"asked her when she is supposed to start working. "
:/

well, the sentence looks fine

But,here are some alternatives
:you could say

I asked when she was supposed to get to work

I asked what time she gets to work


Good luck

[Dalal Khalid]

After that minute she was never the same again, she would never understood that. So she started to go through a certain ritual with her feelings. She cries to release all the confusion, anger, pain and disappointment she received throughout her life. Confusion of why her Father kept ignoring her opinions about his decisions ‘till the last minute. Disappointment of her weakness and her small failures. Anger because he is dead and she has no idea how or why... And pain because she has always felt a nagging sense of pain from a young age; almost as if a part of her was missing.